How does this story sound?

It needs work. You said it's a rough draft so yeah. Some words I think could be added or changed to make it sound better. The flow is a little....not flowy. And when you're writing I hope you're starting a new line for every time someone else speaks. And when she says "I,I don't know." In my opinion this is better, "I...I don't know." To me that's a better way to put it. And is there like a reason all of the names start with A's? To be honest it gets confusing but if there's like reason for it or you purposely used that don't change it if you don't want to. The whole thing over all I'm a little confused. Maybe because I don't know what the next parts but yeah. Your idea isn't bad though. I started when I was 11 and looking back at my first copies of books I'm like WHOA this is horrible. The more you rewrite your story the better it comes and this will seem very amateurish to you. I'm trying to be mean I'm saying keep riding because you've got potential. I hope it helped you.